In the first example, we look at the career profile of a Technologist who had worked closely with Investment Banks (IB) while implementing a FinTech solution.
The narrative starts with the background, then quickly contrasts the regulatory mechanism between banks and platforms. Then, the candidate shares his concerns on how Robo-advisors have taken over retail banking, and it is only a matter of time before automation would start putting pressure on the high commission that IB charges. By citing the $15 Goldman Sach investment in Kensho, generic observation is translated to a specific data point.
The opener of the second half of the essay is an honest acceptance that without an MBA, a technologist like the candidate would not be taken seriously. Without dwelling too much into the reality of how expertise is evaluated, the candidate quotes the curriculum structure of the LBS MBA program. A statistic highlighting London's FinTech dominance over the American counterparts, especially Silicon Valley is quoted as the transition to the next paragraph.
The final paragraph states how serving in the non-profit sector is essential to developing a thorough understanding of the social, technological, ethical, strategic and management issues of a complex problem.