MBA Essay Tips

The first paragraph captures the trend in the hospitality industry that has kept them behind by over two decades. The candidate then describes the numerous strategies the team has adopted to improve the value offered to the guests, from monitoring the spending pattern to notifying the various department on the guest presence, in such a way that the responsibility is clearly defined.

The candidate then cites an MBA information session held in London where her role was to offer an excellent user experience for the admission and marketing team. The talk on London and the Future of Financing are pointed out as the triggering event for her interest in pursuing a post-graduate degree.

The next half of the essay provides details of the skills that the candidate has acquired in the industry and plans to develop through the LBS MBA core curriculum, the Global Experiential learning modules, and the Summer Consulting program.

In the first example, we look at the career profile of a Technologist who had worked closely with Investment Banks (IB) while implementing a FinTech solution.

The narrative starts with the background, then quickly contrasts the regulatory mechanism between banks and platforms. Then, the candidate shares his concerns on how Robo-advisors have taken over retail banking, and it is only a matter of time before automation would start putting pressure on the high commission that IB charges. By citing the $15 Goldman Sach investment in Kensho, generic observation is translated to a specific data point.

The opener of the second half of the essay is an honest acceptance that without an MBA, a technologist like the candidate would not be taken seriously. Without dwelling too much into the reality of how expertise is evaluated, the candidate quotes the curriculum structure of the LBS MBA program. A statistic highlighting London's FinTech dominance over the American counterparts, especially Silicon Valley is quoted as the transition to the next paragraph.

The final paragraph states how serving in the non-profit sector is essential to developing a thorough understanding of the social, technological, ethical, strategic and management issues of a complex problem.

Q) I am Indian CA with GMAT 640. Post-trump Era has been hard on Indian immigrants. Should I target top MBA programs in the US? How should I approach the GMAT re-take?

Instead of randomly studying and re-taking the GMAT, approach the process methodologically:

1) Take a Full Mock GMAT test

2) Review the test for 1 hour

3) Note down all the topics where you have not scored

4) Categorize the mistake: carelessness, lack of knowledge and lack of practice

5) Lack of Knowledge

In this example, we look at the life story of a Technologist, who has found recognition as a leader and as a professional by exercising his superior listening skills. The pattern of listening to peer’s problems began at school and then in college through the candidate’s leadership role. The habit of finding the problem not obvious to the general crowd became an advantage when he found the ‘real reasons’ for the client’s frequent change requests. By calming the nerves of the Chief Technology officer and offering an insight on how they were ahead of the competition, the disruptive behavior of the client stopped.

In the narrative, the candidate is careful not to put the client in a negative light. Instead, he takes extra effort in imagining their worldview. This skill of recognizing problems beyond what is verbalized became an asset. The Employer promoted the client from Technology Consulting to a Project Consulting role. Although the two years in the role was satisfying, the applicant’s insatiable thirst to solve multi-industrial problems has not been met. NYU Stern MBA’s experiential learning in Consulting is pointed out as the major reason for choosing the program.

Essay 2:  Personal Expression
Please describe yourself to your MBA classmates. You may use almost any method to convey your message (e.g. words, illustrations). Feel free to be creative. If you submit a non-written piece for this essay (i.e., artwork or multimedia) or if you submit this essay via mail, please upload a brief description of your submission with your online application.

NYU Stern MBA Essay 2 (Tips): The resume covers your progress as a high achieving professional but the admission team values emotionally intelligent and impact-oriented Stern MBAs. The second question evaluates your personality from another dimension – creativity. How will you introduce yourself if you feel completely comfortable among your peers?

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