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Sample Yale MBA Community Essay - Fitness Community

Describe the community that has been most meaningful to you. What is the most valuable thing you have gained from being a part of this community and what is the most important thing you have contributed to this community?

In this Yale Community Essay, we capture the journey of an applicant who faced a childhood trauma. To cope with the trauma, he and his brother turned to alcohol. Luckily, a timely intervention of a cousin to direct the brothers to bodybuilding saved their lives. An injury forced the applicant from competing professionally, but Fitness was a habit that he wanted to share with teenagers who were undergoing similar trauma as he and his brother did.

The second half of the narrative is around building his non-profit in cities with high homicide rates. By showing his contribution, the applicant is sharing the community that matters most to him. The essay ends with a vision statement for his non-profit.

Sample Yale SOM Community MBA Essay: Mental Health and Fitness Community(498 Words)

2008 – 14th November. A routine drive turned tragic when my father lost control of the car, and we hit a tree. What seemed like a small lax in attention turned fatal. My brother and I couldn’t believe that a small collision could lead to such an outcome. As teenagers, we did the predictable – immerse ourselves in alcohol.

But our cousin’s brother – 5 years our senior, pushed us to join the Gym.

The reps became an obsession to numb the pain.

The Gym Bros, as the public might call them, are our brothers for life. The 2 years we hit the gym gave us an outlet to let go..

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