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Stanford What Matters Essay Mistake #1 – Stating Idealistic Values First & No Functional Experience

The first version of the Stanford MBA What Matters essays are often extremely idealistic or extremely analytical with a growth narrative included in it.

From the two versions, growth-oriented essays are the worst if the barriers to growth are not narrated with examples. Although the idealistic narrative sounds like a naïve interpretation of what the world could be, often change happens from visionaries who start with such naive interpretations. So using an idealistic essay in itself is not a bad strategy. It is when you don’t allocate enough words to demonstrate your previous attempts at solving a similar problem is when idealistic narrative sounds unrealistic.

I have read an example of a consultant who mostly worked in the non-profit space, not as an on-ground implementation person but on the strategy side of the company’s funding product. Even if the person cited working in the same industry, still the narrative was not believable.

Your experience in a particular function is more important than your experience in an industry.

So here are two points that you must keep in mind while drafting your Stanford What Matters Essay

1) Don’t start with a goals narrative as the second question – Why Stanford MBA offers enough space for you to expand on the motivation behind pursuing the goal

2) Don’t start with your value but create a narrative around it to show the admissions team that you care about the value.

Why Storytelling is important for Stanford What Matters Essay

We are wired to remember information in stories. That is a big reason why myths and religion are still relevant. It is a snapshot of some learning that our cultures acquired thousands of years ago. If it was just a fact-based narrative, the information could not have been shared and passed on to us after so many generations.

A similar principle applies when you are asked to write the ‘What Matters Most to You’ essay.

If you start with, let us say - Empathy matters most to you, and then you share a narrative, the impact of your essay won’t be great. But if you share an example of how you demonstrated empathy through your problem-solving, talent management, resource management, or advising clients, then the admissions team will connect with the value that matters most to you.

The same principle applies to Yale’s Commitment Essay and Kellogg’s Values Essay.

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F1GMAT's Stanford MBA Essay Guide

Essay A: What matters most to you, and why? (650 Words)

Essay B: Why Stanford? (350 Words)

Optional Question: Think about times you’ve created a positive impact, whether in professional, extracurricular, academic, or other settings. What was your impact? What made it significant to you or to others? (600 Words) (200 words – each example)

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